Q English Composition II – Adolescent Literature 2221 003 and. 004 Prof. Maureen Robins Email: robinsm@oldwestbury.edu ESSAY 1--Revision The revised essay (and final draft) is due March 9, 2021. Please upload this to Blackboard. For your essay, apply the highlighting protocol that is available to you on padlet in the “revising” column. Please make sure that the colors you use are transparent enough so that the lines highlighted can still be read. • Underline the thesis statement in your introduction and then in your conclusion where it is repeated and expanded. • Underline topic sentences, evidence, and analysis in appropriate colors in your body paragraphs. • After the conclusion of your essay add a paragraph about what you changed from your original draft. Say why you changed what you changed. • Do not tell me that you worked on grammar although sentence level concerns may be edited. I am looking for higher level concerns of crafting thesis statements, the argument made, the evidence utilized and the analysis provided. A checklist for to guide you is included on the next page. You are encouraged to use the services of The Writing Center located in L-242 on the main floor of the Library at Campus Center. You can make an appointment on line at http://oldwestbury.mywconline.com. The phone number is 516-876-3093. If you should use the center, please bring a white ticket of proof. YES NO SEVERE PROBLEMS 1. The essay is a substantial response to the question and presents and develops a coherent thesis. 2. Appropriate evidence is provided, e.g. from personal experience or reading; details and interpretations of readings are broadly accurate. 3. The essay is presented in an organized and logical way. Ideas follow an identifiable sequence both between and within paragraphs. The stages of the essay are effectively marked by paragraph divisions, topic sentences, connectives, etc. 4. The essay demonstrates appropriate critical thinking skills, e.g. use of factual support, relevant information, and logical argumentation. 5. Grammar at the sentence level, including sentence structure, verb and pronoun forms, and agreement is usually correct. Sentence construction corresponds to standard English syntax. Language and vocabulary are varied and precise; inappropriate slang is avoided. 6. Mechanical details, i.e. spelling, capitalization, punctuation, etc., are generally correct. Quotation and documentation, if required, are generally correct.